I Changed It..., hehe.

[Shadowed Heart]

My new version of my story...
(Chpt. One is ALMOST the same as before.
Re-read it anyways!)

[Ben Zwycky]

Sorry for not responding earlier, interesting Prologue, certainly throws a new slant on it, I assume there's a reason in there for this being moved to the Fantasy section rather than the realistic (where the previous version was) You were a bit further on plotwise in the last incarnation, some more changes in store there I presume?

It's good, nice dialogue and internal thoughts, would help to do double carriage returns between paragraphs before you copy and paste it over, otherwise everything gets bunched up and less comfortable to read.

[Shadowed Heart]

So, I nearly finished Chapter Two, and I decided that was entirely too confusing.
So I redid it, throwing in a dream I'd had. But that got a little to strange as well.
So I started AGAIN, leaving only a paragraph of what I'd originally had.
I'm so excited for you guys to read that, but I'm still working on it.
I haven't had much time. So I apologize for that.
But the family issues, school, and work come first.
++
.riss

[Ben Zwycky]

ummm, where's the story gone?

If you only want a few select people to read it, then we can set up a a strongbox in the vault for you, or whatever we end up using at the new site.

[Shadowed Heart]

oh, err... i kinda took it off...
meh...
but yeh, if you wanna set one up for me.
:D

[Ben Zwycky]

done. If you want access to mine, go post in the access panel thread over here