Marty Brown, Marty gains a new father...

[EmmettMcFly55]

Your work on this looks good, so far - even if I would expect Doc and Lorraine to prove to Dave and Linda first that what they are telling them is true, before giving them more information on Marty's experiences. As for that issue, I suppose that Doc should just do what he did to Marty on October 26th - show the time machine going one minute ahead into time.

However, I'm not sure whether Doc would have been capable of converting a station wagon into a time machine at the same time he was working on the DeLorean, especially with him having a family he has to spend time with. It's your story, and it's still good, but you might want to consider that.

[bttf44]

I'm thinking that Doc managed to purchase both the DeLorean and the station wagon prior to performing the test. He works mostly on the DeLorean first - and, after seeing that it works, he then finishes doing the same to the station wagon. I'll be sure to mention that, in the chapter. I understand where you're coming from, but I also know you're kind of anxious to get to the part where they time travel. Doc maybe has his wife help him out, a little - as in handing him tools and stuff.

As for the other issue you bring up, you do make a good point - and I'll modify that part.

[EmmettMcFly55]

Bumping this, to make sure you won't forget about this story. You've only written six chapters yet, but I think it's one of your best so far.

[bttf44]

Glad you like it. As this month is almost over, I'll try to get at least one chapter done in September. As for tonight, I'll try to add something to our collaborative fic.

[EmmettMcFly55]

Bumping this.

[bttf44]

As I said in the topic, instead of starting a new fic for NaNoWriMo, I think I'll just use the months to work on my old fics - including this one. It's what Flaming Trails decided to do, so I figured I'd do the same. I still have to figure out how to set up my page.

[bttf44]

October 27, 2015
4:00 PM PDT

Verne Calvin Brown's eyes grew wide, after the station wagon crossed the space-time barrier. He saw what he felt was quite the most amazing sight ever. There were flying cars everywhere, and the people were wearing outfits that simply appeared to be the stuff that he has seen in science fiction films. He felt that 2015 was a very cool year.

"Here we are, folks!" called out Emmett, cheerfully. "I said that we'd go to the library - but, come to think of it, I would like to see just what the Courthouse Square looks like. For instance, I'm wondering if the clock tower is still remaining intact - clock and all."

"I simply doubt it, Dad," Linda replied, sounding very bored. "You've seen how most of the stores have gone out of business, since Lone Pine Mall opened up. I can't see why that old clock would still be there. Only those Hill Valley Preservation Society kooks..."

"Well, I care about the clock!" Emmett replied, rather sharply. "I don't appreciate you calling those people 'kooks'. There is nothing wrong with caring about history."

"Those people are just living in the past," Linda grumbled, disgustedly. "Anyway, what good is a clock that can't even tell time? All it does is make our town the laughing-stock of California. Do you really think the people who visit our town are impressed by it?"

"That's enough, Linda!" Emmett instructed, firmly. "Anyway, we're almost there. I can catch a little glimpse of the courthouse - so that, I know, is still standing. Since we are here, I think it might be a good idea to turn this station wagon into a flying vehicle."

"That would be awesome!" Verne gasped, excitedly. "Say, do you think you could buy me one of those floating board things? I see quite a few kids on them. They quite look a lot like skateboards, except that... Well, those things don't have wheels on them."

"I'll see what we can do," Emmett replied, gently. "Well, here we are! It sure looks like this part of town is very busy, again. The courthouse is now a mall. Unbelievable! The Texaco station is still standing, there's a movie theatre, and there's a... Cafe '80s?"

"A Cafe '80s? Really?" Linda gasped, astonished. "Oh, I bet it's one of those nostalgic places - sort of like how I've seen some '50s nostalgic places. That sounds very cool!"

"Yeah, I simply wonder what the '80s will be remembered for," Emily added, excitedly. "I was always curious of what future people would think about... us. Would they view us as being very old-fashioned - sort of like how... how we view people of the '50s?"

"Oh, honey, stop making me feel old," Lorraine pleaded, laughing. "I really don't think we were that ancient. Granted, we were a little more conservative - but we..."

"Hey, no offence, Mom," Marty commented, quietly, "but I really found that the week I was was stuck in 1955 was quite boring. I mean, I quite missed my hard rock - and a lot of my favourite TV shows. At least, I didn't miss seeing an episode of Family Ties."

"Well, it could've been a bit worse," Verne offered, gently. "You could've been stuck in the Old West, and possibly been shot in a saloon. I can't imagine what it would be like, growing up in that era. There was no rock music, back then - and no video games."

"Actually, I'm kind of interested in the Old West," Jules replied, excitedly. "It'd be very nice, in fact, to live in a much less polluted era... and an era that isn't quite so noisy... and everything isn't so fast-paced. Sure, there are things that I'd rather miss - but it'd be so nice to enjoy the great outdoors. Say, Dad, could we ever visit the Old West?"

"Well, it is my favourite historical era," Emmett replied, as a smile tugged at his lips. "It would very tempting to take you up on your idea, but... Well, there simply are a lot of risks that can come with backwards time travel." He sighed, before continuing, "I think we should check out the Cafe '80s. Perhaps, we could even grab something to eat."

"That sounds like a nice plan," Lorraine agreed, as her husband pulled into an alley. "It simply is an exciting experience. Now, kids, when we're in the Cafe '80s - or anywhere else besides here, you're not to say anything about time travel. Do you understand?"

"That's correct," Emmett replied, nodding. "We can't let anyone know that we're from the past - so you need to do your best to act inconspicuously. Try not to do anything that could draw some unwanted attention to ourselves. Think you kids can do that?"

As all six children nodded, Verne smiled. He always did find his father to be quite cool - but, now that his father invented a time machine, he felt that it was even cooler. That made him feel very lucky. He wondered how many time travel trips he would go on.

oooooooooo

Jules George Brown swallowed, just as his family stepped into the Cafe '80s. He heard The Power of Love by Huey Lewis and The News playing from the speakers. He looked around - and, in fact, it simply did look like a nostalgia place. He saw that there were a lot of '80s paraphernalia, everywhere he looked. However, it also looked futuristic.

"This place doesn't look done real well," Emmett muttered. Jules nodded, as he agreed with his father. Indeed, Jules was unimpressed with the cafe. His younger brother, on the other hand, seemed to be quite enthralled. Verne always was easily impressed.

"Welcome to the Cafe '80s," one of the video waiters called out, just as it greeted the Brown family, "where it's always morning in America. How could I he-he-he-help you?"

"Could we really, uh, see a menu?" Emmett asked, nervously. Immediately, something that resembled a small computer popped up. "What in the name of Sir Isaac H Newton is that?" Emmett asked, stunned. "This unit is a... computerized menu. Fascinating!"

"Would they happen to have fried chicken?" Verne asked, eagerly. "I sure could go for a three-piece chicken dinner - along with a baked potato, topped with sour cream."

"I'll have the same thing," Jules added, hungrily. "That's if they have it, of course."

"Why do you boys eat so much?" Linda grumbled. "Why do you have to be so piggy?"

"Cut that out, Linda!" Emmett admonished, sharply. He scanned the small computer, as he added, "Well, you boys are in luck. What would the rest of you like to have?"

"I'll just have a tossed salad," Linda commented, "with low-fat French dressing. And I'll have skim milk to drink with it. Unlike some people, I believe in eating healthy."

"That's enough, Linda!" Emmett scolded, wearily. "Quit with the attitude. I was hoping that we'd have a fun family trip, together. So, if you don't have anything constructive to say, just don't say anything at all. Dave, Marty, Emily - what would you kids like?"

"Would they happen to have sirloin steak, by any chance?" Dave asked. "If so, I'd like to have that. I'd also like a baked potato, with sour cream, to go with it - and Pepsi."

"What about beer-battered cod?" Emily asked. "I'll have a three-piece beer-battered cod, with extra tarter sauce. I'll have hash browns with ketchup, and a root beer."

"Do they have BLT sandwiches?" Marty asked. "I'll have three of those, and a Pepsi."

"You kids are all in luck!" Emmett exclaimed, smiling. "They have all those things. What about you, Lorrie? Have you decided what you'd like to have?"

"Two beef french dip sandwiches," Lorraine replied, quietly. "Don't forget the au jus."

"Got it," Emmett replied, as he began to punch in some buttons. "Come to think of it, I think I'll have the same thing." Suddenly, he gasped, "Great Scott! Look at the price!"

"Good heavens!" Lorraine gasped, as she glanced into the computer. "How on earth are we gonna pay for all that? I didn't expect for the inflation to get that bad!"

"We're supposed to pay with our thumbs," Emmett whispered. "I'm sure that, over the past thirty years, our bank account quite managed to acquire much interest. We could try... that." He pressed his thumb to the computer, and exclaimed, "Yay! It works!"

Jules breathed a sigh of relief, as he felt quite hungry. He really had to admit that the future frightened him, a little. After all, it quite seemed to be a lot different from what he was used to. He quite wished that his father had chosen to visit the past, instead.

"Wow! That was fast!" exclaimed Lorraine, as the food began to pop up on the table. "So, Emmett, this is what the future is like. I'm not so sure that I'd wanna stay here."

"Oh, I would!" Verne commented, eagerly. "This place looks so awesome. The eighties seem boring, by comparison. Please, Dad, can't we move here? I wanna live here!"

"Sorry, sport, but we can't," Emmett replied, shaking his head. "We don't belong here, same as we don't belong in the fifties... or in the Old West, for that matter. Now, how about we just eat our dinners - and, please, let's not draw attention to ourselves."

Jules nodded, as he opened up the box the his food came in. He could not understand why his younger brother wished to live in the future. Even though there might be a lot of interesting gadgets, he found the future to be rather unfamiliar and intimidating. At least, it was possible to study the past - which was not possible to do with the future.

"I just can't believe this!" Linda groaned. "See what everyone else is wearing. Look at what we're wearing. People everywhere are staring at us. I don't like the idea of being dressed thirty years out of date. Can we go shopping, after we're done here?"

Emmett stared at his wife for a few seconds, then responded, "I suppose so. Come to think of it, I really am tempted to set up an appointment for myself. I couldn't help but notice this advertisement on top of my box for a... a rejuvenation overhaul surgery."

"In that case," Lorraine replied, softly, "you definitely should go for it. Especially if it's supposed to..." She grabbed the box that Emmett's food came in, and continued, "... to add thirty or forty years to your life. I certainly would like for you to live longer."

"Thanks, Lorrie," Emmett replied, softly. "Well, while I do that, you make certain that the kids stay out of trouble. Also, do not even think about looking up our futures. No man should know too much about his own destiny. Otherwise, it could be a major risk to the space-time continuum - just like when Marty was stuck back in the year 1955."

Jules swallowed, as he saw his mother nod. Perhaps, there really were advantages to the future. If medical advances could quite allow for longer life expectancies, he could support that. After all, he valued life. Nonetheless, he felt intimidated by the future.

[EmmettMcFly55]

Good work! Sometime later on, Doc and Lorraine will have to explain more about Marty's week in 1955 to the kids, or at least to Dave and Linda. After all, Linda should know why Doc cares about the clock so much, and what Marty said in the last chapter implied that George wasn't dead in the timeline he was from - something Dave, at least, would want to know more about. And I can't see them buying Lorraine's "I was trying to be nice to him" story about Marty either, especially if they know something about Calvin Klein.

[bttf44]

Good points. I'll definitely have Doc and Lorraine explain to Dave and Linda more about that week.

[bttf44]

Marty Brown Universe Details:

1. Marty marries Jennifer, and they have Marlene and Marty Jr. Nothing changes there.
2. Jules marries Patti Franklin, and they have Harmony and Melody - just like in the Trilogy Universe.
3. I haven't decided who Verne marries, yet. They have two children: Serena and Benjamin. Serena is five, and Benjy is just a baby.
4. Marty McFly Jr and Harmony Brown are best friends, just like in the Trilogy and Haven Universes.
5. Since, in this universe, Marty Jr and Harmony are cousins - they don't end up together. While some readers may not mind, others might be too squicked out by it - so it's probably better just to have them end up with other people.
6. Marty Jr ends up with Stephanie Stebbs - but, unlike the other universes where they end up together, they meet much later. Marty Jr meets Stephanie on Christmas Eve of 2016, as he's picking up a movie for Marlene.
7. Harmony, sometime in late-2016, ends up with Aaron Nelson.
8. As a result, during this particular fic, Marty Jr and Harmony are both single.
9. Haven't decided who Emily ends up with, yet. Tentatively, she has a son named Todd.
10. Linda marries Kevin Maxwell, and has a son named Brent. No changes here, either.
11. Dave marries a Renee, and moves to New York. They have two children: Tanya and Nancy. Since Dave never changed his last change, they're still McFlys.
12. Marty used to have a problem with being called "chicken" - but, when he was very young, the combined efforts of Emmett and Lorraine help to nip it right in the bud. As such, we don't see a bad future.

Now, idea for next chapter:

1. We skip to where Lorraine takes the children to a clothing store at Courthouse Mall, while Emmett is at the rejuvenation clinic.
2. The chapter has two sections: Marty's and Linda.
3. Linda's section starts with her stepping outside a changing room. She is wearing sparkly electric-blue mini-skirt and a hot-pink shirt with purple sequins.
4. Marty meets Harmony, who mistakes him for his future son.
5. Linda meets Brent, who she instantly feels attracted to. She doesn't realize that Brent is her future son, nor that he's already dating Melinda Kirby.

BTW, I'm open to suggestions.

[bttf44]

October 27, 2015
5:15 PM PDT

After the Brown family was finished eating, Emmett headed to the rejuvenation clinic - while Lorraine brought the rest of the family to Courthouse Mall, which was across the street from the Cafe '80s. Marty was quite taken aback by what he saw, as the family stepped into a clothing store. He found the fashions of the future to be very strange.

"Dave, Linda, and Marty," Lorraine called out. "The three of you can look around, and see if you find anything that you like. You're simply not to leave the store, though. As for the rest of you, you're to stay with me at all times. Do you children understand?"

Marty, along with his siblings, nodded. He and his elder two siblings then parted ways, while the others headed for the children's department. He felt uneasy, as he hoped to find some fairly normal clothes. The future could not have changed that much.

He caught sight of a section that was marked "Band Shirts". There was something that might really be of interest to him, considering his love of rock music. He walked over to that section, wondering just what he would find. On the various shirts - he saw names like Disturbed, Slipknot, and Avenged Sevenfold. Names that were unfamiliar to him.

As Marty did some deeper searching, he finally saw some band names that he actually recognized. He found a couple Van Halen shirts, a few Led Zeppelin shirts, and quite a fair number of AC/DC shirts. There was no Huey Lewis and The News shirt, though.

"Hey, Marty, what are you doing here?" asked an unfamiliar feminine voice. As Marty turned around, he saw a girl who quite appeared to be about his age. She had bright blond curly hair and blue-green eyes. "I thought you were... were with your band."

"With... my... band?" Marty stammered, as he stared at the girl. Why did she seem to recognize him? "Oh, yeah, right. My band! Well, I, uh... I guess I changed my mind."

"Are you feeling okay, Marty?" the girl asked, with concern. "Is everything all right?"

"Uh, yeah, everything's fine," Marty replied, nervously. Just who was that girl? "I'm just feeling, uh, a little bit... under the weather. So, uh, what's up with you?"

"I'm just here to look at band shirts," the girl replied, quietly. "I'm sorry that you aren't feeling well. I suppose you're feeling a bit nervous about that science test we have on Thursday. Mr. Miskin didn't seem to appreciate your joke about what a 'foo fighter' is."

"Uh, foo fighter," Marty muttered, as he certainly had no idea what the girl meant. As he simply took a closer look at the girl's shirt - he saw that she was wearing a red shirt that said "Foo Fighters", with a lightning bolt going through the words. "I, uh... That's a very nice shirt. I really love it. I, uh... I also decided to look for a new band shirt."

"Well, this always was my favourite shirt," the girl replied, nodding. "I quite remember how sad I felt, when the other one became too small for me. I'll sure never forget the time, when you and I were only ten - and we sneaked off to a Foo Fighters concert."

"Uh, yeah, right," Marty stammered, as he felt uneasy. He had never heard of a band called "Foo Fighters", and just who did the blonde girl think he was? "It was fun."

"Are you sure you're feeling okay, Marty?" the girl asked, with concern. "You're acting a little as if... as if you... just don't recognize me. I'm Harmony. Harmony Brown. I am your cousin... and your best friend. If anything's bothering you, Marty, just tell me."

"Uh, right, Harmony," Marty replied, swallowing. Did the girl... Harmony... really think he was his future son? Did he end up naming his future son after himself? "I'm sorry. I guess I, uh... I probably should go home, and relax. I'm just not... feeling the best."

"I think you should, Marty," Harmony agreed, softly. "Perhaps, Mr. Miskin should have mellowed out, a bit. I thought your joke was simply funny, as did the rest of the class. After all, these days, most people probably are a bit more familiar with the rock band - rather than with the aerial phenomena. C'mon, Marty, how about I drive you home?"

"Uh, no, that's okay," Marty replied - although, truth to be told, he was curious to see what his future home looked like. "Thanks for your concern, though. You're certainly a very good friend. I, uh... I felt it'd simply be... relaxing... to spend some time here."

"Well, okay," Harmony replied, as she patted Marty's back. "As long as you're certain about that. How about I give you a call, tonight? I do hope you feel better, soon."

"Yeah, Harmony, see ya!" Marty called out, as he flashed a lopsided smile at the girl who thought he was her cousin. He watched on - as Harmony just waved back, and then walked out of the store. He muttered, "Just what the hell was all that about?"

oooooooooo

Linda smiled, just as she stepped out of the changing room. She felt pleased with her new outfit. She was wearing a sparkly electric-blue mini-skirt and a hot-pink shirt with purple sequins. Indeed, she found the fashions of the future to be rather exciting. It made her wonder what all her friends would think. She envied the future generation.

She walked over to Lorraine, as she quite wished to get to the bottom of what exactly happened between her mother and "Calvin Klein". There quite had to be much more to the situation. She felt it in her gut. Her mother was not simply "being nice" to "Calvin".

"Oh, hi, Linda," Lorraine called out, as she glanced. "Wow! Your outfit! It sure looks... interesting. Well, I suppose this is what the fashionable children of the future wear."

"Yeah, I guess so," Linda replied, quietly. She swallowed, as she added, "Listen, Mom, there's a little matter that we need to discuss. It pertains to 'Calvin Klein'... and you."

"Yes, 'Calvin Klein' is Marty," Lorraine replied, wearily. "Just what are you getting at?"

"Well, Mom," Linda replied, swallowing, "I really wanted to... Look, Mom, I'm gonna be upfront with you. I know there's something that you're not telling me. What made you decide to... be nice... to 'Calvin Klein'? Somehow, this claim of yours doesn't add up."

"Can't I just be nice to someone," Lorraine asked, defensively, "just because I believe in being kind to newcomers?" Linda gave her mother a hard stare, as she simply found her mother response to be unconvincing. "All right, fine! Yes, it was more than that!"

"Ha! I knew it!" Linda exclaimed, triumphantly. "Now, Mom, I really want you to tell me exactly what happened between you and 'Calvin'. Do not try to hide anything!"

"My goodness! Aren't you the persistent type?" Lorraine grumbled, as she sighed with resignation. "All right, fine, everything really started... when Dad ran Marty over with the car. I felt bad for him, and I also thought he was... quite cute. As a result, I..."

"Wait a minute!" Linda interjected, as she really had a feeling that she knew what was about to come next. "Did you... get a big crush... on Marty? On your very own son?"

"Uh, yes! Yes!" Lorraine replied, as she turned red in the face. "Linda, just how was I supposed to know... that 'Calvin Klein' was my future son? There simply wasn't a way I could know that. As far as I knew, he was nothing more than a... a stranger."

"Mom, how could you?" Linda gasped, as he felt sudden anger. "There had to be some way you could've known that... that he was related to you! For heaven's sake, I can't believe that you would do something so... so disgusting! That makes me feel so sick!"

Linda felt great repulse and rage, as she stalked off to find some more clothes. Never before had she felt so disgusted with her mother. It simply was the most unforgivable thing her mother could have done. How could her mother have been so disgraceful?

"Honey, please," Lorraine begged, as she sounded tearful. "Just try to understand."

"Save it, Mom," Linda muttered, as she sure was not in the mood to listen to any more of her mother's excuses. She ran to the other side of the store. "Leave me alone!"

Linda was so blinded by rage, she did not notice where she was running - until she ran into someone. She took a close look at the person that she just ran into, and saw that it was a young man. The other man appeared to be about her age... and looked cute.

"I'm sorry, uh, mister," Linda mumbled, as she helped the young man up. "I didn't see you. I should've watched where I was going. I didn't mean to run into you, like that."

"Uh, that's okay, miss," the young man replied, gently. "It happens to all of us. By the way, you look familiar to me. Have we met before? My name's Brent. Brent Maxwell."

"Oh, hi, Brent," Linda greeted, warmly. "Uh, no, I don't think we've met. I simply don't live around here. My name is, uh, Lydia. Lydia McClure. I'm visiting from Elmdale. I felt like, uh, checking out a different mall. I must say, Brent, it's very nice to meet you."

"It's nice to meet you, too, Lydia," Brent replied, warmly. "I quite love the outfit that you're wearing. You do remind me a little of my cousin, Marlene. She enjoys dressing like that, too. I really do think the two of you should meet each other, sometime."

"That would be a real great pleasure, uh, Brent," Linda replied, smiling. She wondered if Brent was available. Indeed, he really did look cute. Granted, she had a feeling that her parents simply would not approve of her having a relationship with a boy from the future - but, still, she felt attracted to him. "Maybe I'll see you around, sometime."

"Well, Lydia, I should get going," Brent replied, as he glanced at his watch. "I sure did promise Melinda that I'd meet her at the Holomax Theatre, in fifteen minutes. I'm glad that we met, though. You take care of yourself, Lydia - and have a good evening."

Linda smiled, as she waved to Brent. She quite wondered who Melinda was. Perhaps, she was just Brent's sister. She liked the name "Melinda", and she always wished that that was her full name. She quite began to wonder if a boy like Brent Maxwell existed in the 1980s. She then understood how Verne felt. The future really was interesting.

[EmmettMcFly55]

Very good job so far. But I thought Marty was adopted by Doc in your universe. As a result, Harmony would not really be Marty Junior's cousin. Also, in the chapter, it says "That future could have changed too much" where I think you mean "The future couldn't have changed too much" or "The future couldn't have changed that much".

If I think of anything to suggest, I'll present it. I do have a question, though - does Brent recognize Linda right away, or doesn't he?

I guess it would go like this:

- After picking up her skirt, Linda walks over to her mother. She questions her about 1955, and Lorraine confesses the extent of the crush she had on Marty.
- Linda is appalled, and reprimands Lorraine for the whole thing. She angrily walks off to pick up some more clothes. Then, she encounters Brent.

Is that about right?

[bttf44]

Actually, Lorraine is Jules' mother - as well as Marty's mother. So Marty Jr and Harmony would still be half-cousins. And, yeah, you're right about the mistake. I'll go fix it.

That's a good idea on how Linda's section should do. As Brent doesn't yet know about time travel, he can't really know that Linda is his mother. He does think she looks very familiar, though.

Probably, after about two more chapters, I'll switch over to the POV of some of the future characters.

[EmmettMcFly55]

Oh yeah, of course. It's just so weird to remember that Lorraine is Jules' mother.

[bttf44]

I don't blame you. It feels kinda weird for me, too. It's also kinda weird to have Doc end up with someone who's not even related to Clara.