A easy or two, simple and unelaborated

[Eon Night]

I see you smiling when i cry

I see your heart filled with pride

Finally the monster lies there defeated

You destroyed me

Devoured my Smile

When you turn around and nood pleased

You will feel that just a whisper

walks slowly by your side

"I hope you had the time of your life"

[Eon Night]

Don't expect too much, ja.

I never take the time to elaborate 'em ..

[Eon Night]

.. Had a nightmare last
Night
woke up and saw
You were afraid !!
On the harsh life way
We will travel through
It is so much easier
When we are in
Two
It is so much harder
Crying without
You

[Esy]

Well I actually like your poems! Yeah, it's true that I don't understand the theme quite well in some parts but overall these are nice poems! I have one little thing to say about the second though... Try not to break the lines so harsh... Try to make a softer transition between the two verses, and count the syllables so it would have a nicer flow! That's all... I hope you don't mind some constructive criticism! ^_~

[Eon Night]

constructive criticism never hurts

I think my writing will improve a lot when i finally decide to take some ufficial english courses , it suffers from the grammatic influence of my other languages...

[Esy]

You're mother language isn't english? Where are you from then? I completely understand you, cause my native tongue isn't english as well! *grins*

[Eon Night]

I'm a vagabond ..and thats a really tough job. After a while you're neither from this place nor from the other one. You're someone who is constantly chasing an identity

To quote Biff from "death of a traveling salesman" :

"I can't understand , mother ...i try so hard but it seems i can't do it.." or something like that.

And now an easy one from a landsgirl o' mine

The gentle loving breeze

Just like the wind breeze
That gently touches your hair right now
I contemplate about the days
When my hands substituted the air of the breeze
God,I could not be more happy than then
For as much as I try I can not reach your hair
But no matter what,I will try to find you
In the gentle breeze of the april wind

[Esy]

Well I'm from Croatia! If you know where it is! *grins*

I love this poem! It has a wonderful flow and rhythm, and the theme is fantastic! Keep it up!