Arterius Vakarian

Player's Information:

Name: Liam
Nickname: Liam will do
Age: 18
Status: Member
Contact Info: laim_is_cool@hotmail.com That’s both my e-mail and MSN

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Character Sheet

Name: Arterius Vakarian
Gender: Male
Age: 34
Race: Human yet he does not look it.
Faction: Used to be a member of the Adai yet left because of his lust for power.
Rank: Used to be an Advocate before he left the Adai
*Weapons: His weapon is a standard red bladed light saber yet the hilt is old and rusty, and the blade flickers every now and again due to a cracked crystal.
Occupation: Rogue Adai
Hobbies: Learning more about the force and the dark side, causing pain, destruction and the death of others. Pretty much everything evil.

Force Powers:

Core Powers:
Telepathy
Telekinesis
Burst of Speed
Force Sense
Force Cloak
Force Concealment

Universal Powers:
Force Whirlwind
Force Valor
Precognition

Light Side Powers:
Battle Precognition
Force Healing
Force Absorb

Dark Side Powers:
Force Rage
Force Lightning
Force Choke
Force Heal

Character Descriptions

Hair: He has no hair
Eyes: One of his eyes are red with a hint of yellow outside the iris. His other eye is a cybernetic implant and pure white.
Height: Arterius is seven feet tall
Weight: 320 lbs

*Other Visible Features: Other than his torn flesh and deformities Arterius also has a few implants in order to numb the constant pain he feels as well as help hold his body together. Some of these implants are too big to be fully integrated inside his body and so a few bolts are visible on his body, mostly on his chest and back with a small few on his arms. They are most prominent on his spine.

Description: At first glance of the dark jedi you will notice that he has been in many battles since he is completely covered in injuries and scars however what people do not realise is that most of his appearance is a side effect to his mastery of the dark side. As he continued to do evil his body started to change and his flesh began to decompose, becoming covered in cracks and scars. His bones are also cracked and chipped however he is still incredibly tough and resilient. His skin has also changed colour, looking more pale and the hair from his body fell off as this began to happen. He however sees his appearance as a look of power as he became larger in appearance, standing far larger than any other human he had met. His muscles in his body, like the rest of him toughened yet they did not decompose. They also became larger and more prominent, making a Wookiee look like an Ewok.

While his body stayed intact Arterius was a scientific man in nature and believed that while the force was indeed powerful he wouldn’t put his life in its hands and so, in order to keep himself intact he started to use cybernetic implants on himself. His right eye was replace with a cybernetic one as a small part of his face began to decompose. He had his right arm was almost completely replaced with a robotic one with the exception of his shoulder and a small part of his bicep. He also had some implants placed inside his body to keep it all together however a few bolts were visible as the came out his chest and back. His skeleton was re-enforced because of the many cracks in his bones and was covered in a hard but light and flexible substance. His voice box is also prosthetic since his other one was damaged in a battle. As a result his voice sounds a much more robotic. He has also had a few minor cybernetic replacements on his knee caps however they are not noticeable.

Arterius usually only wears clothing on the lower half of his body with the exception of a shoulder pad and glove, both on his left arm. He wears incredibly baggy trousers and boots cover that go up to his knees over them. He also has a leather waistband to keep them up and a ragged and torn cloth that hangs from it. All of his clothes are black with the exception of his shoulder pad which is mostly black with some red at the centre and a strange symbol in the middle of it. His shoulder pad is connected to two of the bolts that come out of his chest and back in order to keep it up. When he it out in public however he wears a long, black cloak and a hooded robe to hide his appearance as well as an old, rusty helmet from the clone wars in which he had painted black so it was unrecognisable as a clone troopers helm.

Finally, Arterius carries himself in a way unlike orders. He slouches ever so slightly when he walks but as he stands he stands completely straight, usually with his arms crossed to give off a feeling of power and royalty. There is always the look of insanity in his eyes and his always carries the smile of a psychopath, making him seem untrustworthy. The way he holds his light saber is also unique, letting the blade face to the back and holding it up, just keeping it inches away of his back yet standing completely straight and focused.

Avatar: Haven’t thought of one yet but this is pretty much the appearance I’m going for.



Personality:
Power Hungry: Power. It is the thing that keeps Arterius ticking and the thing he wants more than anything. He would do anything to advance his power in the force, his physical abilities and to conquer planets. Most people believe that he became like this because of his training in the dark side of the force but in truth he always had this obsession with power. Many people also believe that it was the reason he left the Adai. That he hated training under a master and believed that he was his own master and that no one was in control of him. In his own eyes, even if he did go as high as to be a part of the tribunal itself he would still have to share his power with the rest of them and that was something he simply refused to do. He did not want to share power but keep it for himself and because of that he eventually left the Adai, believing that he had better chance advancing through the force and advancing in other ways on his own.

Psychotic: Now this is something that everyone who knows Arterius agrees with. The man is completely insane and willing to do anything to get what he wants. He has done many evil things and not all of them had a reason. Sometimes he killed and tortured people just for pleasure and sometimes he even did it just for the sake of doing it. He gets a thrill and a buzz out of causing bloodshed and making people crack. He has even drove other to insanity, making people kill the ones they know and love, yet these things are just for fun. Usually he doesn’t go out killing unless there is a purpose since it wastes “valuable time”. He spends most of his time capturing, torturing and experimenting on innocents or many planets and races, trying to learn more about the force and genetic augmentations, trying to make himself the perfect being. After experimenting with them however he immediately kills them, believing them to be of no further use.

Highly intelligent: Another thing that makes him dangerous along with his insanity is his high intelligence. His parents where both scientists for the empire, inventing many types of weapons and new equipment for them. Arterius was taught at the finest school on Coruscant and his parents also home schooled him whenever they had free time. He always had an interest in science and continued to feed his hunger for knowledge after he was accepted into the Adai. When he left the Adai he began using the knowledge he learnt over the years for his twisted experiments to increase his power, capturing people and using them as lab rats, using force crystals and genetic augmentation to try and find ways to manipulate the force and biology. It was his dream to become the perfect being and it was something he was never going to stop doing until he achieved his goal.

Cold, Heartless: This is probably the most well known thing about Arterius and that is that he only cares about himself. He has no problem killing anyone or doing anything so long as it benefits him. He proved this himself as he killed his own parents who tried to stop him from leaving the Adai. He didn’t even blink as he done it. Some people even said that he probably got a thrill out of it since his parents were the first people he had ever killed. While no one witnessed the event the rumour that he enjoyed it happens to be true. It was that day he developed a bloodlust and he has never question what he done. He never even though about it after he did it. Sure there was a time he cared for them but when as he learnt more about the force all he wanted was power no matter what. It made him completely heartless. Using people and betraying them at a moments notice. If someone is no longer of use then the best and only option is to eliminate them to cover his tracks. He has always done this and never regretted it.

History: Going to write a journal

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Example RP:

Example from Starbuck Institution:

He listened to every word she was saying even though he wasn’t looking directly at her. His eyes were still scanning the room, trying to look for something similar to him but no matter how much he looked and listened he couldn’t connect to anything in the room. There was nothing that he clicked too, not even the woman, know matter how nice she was being to him. He appreciated it but even she seemed different and strange to him. It was the way she acted but it had nothing to do about how nice she was since he liked that. It was the way she stood, talked and moved. It was strange to him yet so was everything. That was pretty much a bad situation for him. He had amnesia and there was nothing what so ever to help him jog his memory. He was out of place here and he did not like it, however he got more used to the infirmary as time passed. He still had no idea what Starbucks Institute was however she had already answered his question and he didn’t want to bother her with more since he had already asked a lot.

He looked down as she took his hand. She was gentle in her movements as she tried not to startle him. He looked buck up at her, straight into her eyes as he simply followed and let her take him back to the table he was on which he sat on without a fuss. This was her place as far as he was concerned and he was the guest here. She was simply trying to help him and look after him while he was in such a strange environment and his memory was completely gone. He continued to stare at her while she examined him and studied him, his expression still blank. He was doing the exact same thing, studying her. He knew she was not like him and as soon as he touched him he could tell that he was far more fragile than him. He would have to be very careful around her, actually around everything. He found it hard to be gentle and to try not to break anything around him. Everything was all so weak and breakable.

He continued to stare at her as she mentioned her name but this time his eyes stayed pinned to hers. He was trying to learn as much about her as he could. He wanted to know more about the woman who was helping him in his time of need. From were he was sitting he believed like he owed her something. He was glad that she was so willing to help him even though she knew nothing about him and he believed that she thought there was nothing in it for her, yet she still helped him. He tried to understand why she would do such a thing. Of course she mentioned that she was his doctor and while that was probably enough for her for him there had to be something more. He didn’t know why but there just had to be. Whether it had something to do with his culture or the way he was raised he really just couldn’t say. All he knew was that his heart sank when she couldn’t tell him who she was. He face still held a blank expression but the sadness could be noticed in his eyes.

He turned his head to one of her hands when she moved them close to his head. He stayed still as she held his head with both of her hands yet he was nervous, not knowing what it was she was doing. He stared into her eyes again and was a little bit startled when she blinked and her eyes changed. Not only in colour but they were twirling round as if they led somewhere. It was all very strange to him, like nothing he had ever seen before. Then she started talking, to herself most likely, about his anatomy. It startled her and that’s when she confirmed what he was thinking without saying anything. She was different from him or rather he was different from her and possibly the two men keeping guard of him. She said he was healthy and that was good enough for him, but how does she truly know that she’s healthy? He had a feeling she had never met anything like him before so how does she know if he’s healthy or not? What may be vitals for someone like her doesn’t mean they are healthy vitals for him, yet he didn’t worry. She obviously knew what she was doing or else she wouldn’t be doing it.

The sadness stayed in his eyes when she said that she couldn’t heal him. It meant that he will continue to be puzzled and in a strange place. He was optimistic though, looking at it as a new beginning but at the same time he couldn’t help but wonder about who and what he is.

He nodded and gave a very small smile when she said that for the time being that he should be called John. The name also seemed foreign but he was okay with it.

“Thank you for helping me Ana. I appreciate it. Can I stand now?”

He didn't really seem that bothered about whatever she was doing with his eyes. The bright light didn't really faze him that much.

Liam, bare with us while we look over your application. There are a few sticking points that we are discussing. Not to worry, though, we'll have you up and running soon.

I was waiting for others to respond first, but I suppose I will throw my opinion in while I'm doing nothing else. I think that the general consensus of the staff is that we would like to see your journal entry be an account of the past for your character. That said, I personally think that it would be just as easy to write up a history. So, either way, I suppose that is up to you. But I would like to see how he has gotten to be the type of person that he is and how he left the Adai. For what reasons, if any, besides the fact that he is a psycho?

Also, I'd like to know how he is advancing himself through the Force when he has no guidance outside of the Adai. And maybe how is he planning on keeping himself unnoticed when he is the type of person that kills and tortures for the hell of it. In my understanding of the Adai, and Lucy could correct me if I'm wrong, I believe that the Adai are still trying to have a more positive appearance for the galaxy to see so that the Empire can continue to gain power by gaining the interest of the common people. With agents that would give off such a negative look, I don't see how the Adai would allow him to continue going on forward. So if, in your history, he is booted out of the Adai or whether he just simply leaves the order... I'd like to know the circumstances of that. If he is booted out and continues in his actions, I'm sure that the Adai would continue to take notice of him and probably attempt to rectify the situation.

Another thing is that I personally believe that the negative outward appearance of the Dark Side is more visibly apparent in upper echelon of Dark Side users who have become totally overwhelmed by their power. Such as Anakin, who was about the same level as your character would be (that being a Knight), had just started to see physical changes in his appearance... And lets not forget the example of Palpatine, who was suffering very small outward appearance changes until he was electified. While these are just a couple of movie examples, they are still canon. In my understanding, you would have to be one evil mofo in order to have such a negative outward appearance due to the Dark Side... since your character seems to have no restraint, it could be fitting for him.. But again, I would like to see some of this in his history/journal.

Other than that, I think I'd be okay with the app. It is pretty clear what I'd like to see... a good history or a journal that basically accounts his history that makes sense for your character and helps to visualize how he is what he is..

Sorry I've had a bit of a hectic sleepless weekend especially with work and a role-play game this evening but I can now leave a reply here.

First of all I fully agree with Steve we need to hear more history in this case. Especially about how he came to leave the Adai and what he was like during his time with them. If he was like he is now I can't really see them having worked together. The Adai like to distance themselves from anything remotely obviously Sith like in their organisation and actions. As it stands at the moment I think the Adai would simply see him as too obvious, unbalanced and imprecise a weapon to use (perhaps the reason he left/was made to leave). It is possible the other thing they have been doing to distance themselves publicly from the Sith or general dark side groups is pointing him out as an example of the dark side in a “we're not of the dark side, we fighting the dark side just as much if not more than the Jedi, that is an example of the dark side” way. Of course by this they would possibly have to do something about the dark side threat he presented.

Not sure if it's just my laptop being funny but the type is very small could you possibly use a larger one on later posts.

You say he's mastered the dark side? I realise it's just a turn of phrase but no one has really mastered any aspect of the force not even masters and council members certainly not a Knight rank.

You also use an interesting turn of phrase when you say he makes a Wookie look like an Ewok. Wookies are all in excess of two meters tall. That is 6'ft 6 at their shortest and if memory serves they go up to 7 or 8 which is about 2 and 3/4ths of a meter. Your really not going to find many species that make them look like Ewoks let alone a human.

As far as his general description goes he has extensive cybernetics it is accepted cannon that this does reduce your connection to the force and force powers cannot be channelled through them. This means you cannot channel force lightening through that hand (hence why it's thought Vader never used it) just as you can't really enhance the strength of a full cybernetic limb using the force.
You also say he has a hard and light material covering the bone of his skeleton? No such technology exists to do that in the Star Wars universe to my knowledge. It would require them removing the flesh around the bone to do it (the medical technology isn't up to it and it would be excruciating at the very least) and even then would also need them to somehow allow the bone marrow to release new red blood cells into the body otherwise he'd be dead in days strong in the force or not.

The last two problems I have are mostly just typos where you seem to have missed out words or I'm not entirely sure I can understand your meaning. The two main examples of this are:
“Finally, Arterius carries himself in a way unlike orders”
and
“There is always the look of insanity in his eyes and his always carries the smile of a psychopath, making him seem untrustworthy”

Although you might also find it difficult to find others to play with IC with this kind of description. Would you work with/talk with someone that has that look in their eyes or has that smile? Not picking holes on that just pointing out they may be difficult to post with and for.

Just flagging this for attention, Liam.

Yo Dudes!

Sorry I ain't been on for ages. Computer kinda broke. Anyhoo, thanks for point out the bits and bobs. I'll get to work on all of them write away. Seriously did not know how much of them there would be. Any help or advice on the character would be good Bloody Brilliant!

Don't really know what you're asking for here, Liam. Just go over what was already said and make the corrections... and then let us know when they are done afterwards. You're character isn't that far off from being accepted, I just think a solid history of why he left the Adai is in order... along with what the others said.

Well it's been a month and there's been no change here so I'm gonna send this app to the graveyard. If you do come back feel free to drop one of us a message in the cbox or re-register and send us a pm and we'll move it back for you to make the changes.