PA's Feedback Thread

Hi, so you've read an episode or two of my Atlantis Seasons or my poems or short stories???

Great, then please leave feedback, its so much appreciated as it really helps a writer get a better perspective of how to improve etc...

Be honest, be brutal, I can take it as long as its constructive criticism lol or be nice...

I'm the first


I love your fics (the first fic I keep reading btw), they are fantastic. I get really into the stories when I read them (that's probably why I read so slowly ). And when I finished an ep I can't wait to start the next one (they are the only non university stories I read at the moment)
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I just finished reading Episode 8 of Season 1!


The Dark Side

Really dark episode... even darker than Ep5 if you ask me. Because Shep is a bad boy in this ep. Really bad. I first thought/hoped he would just pretend the bad boy thing... but I was proven wrong.
Oh, Major Lorne. He's such a good guy. I really loved the interaction between him and Keeta, though I hope John will be fine again, and Keeta and Lorne will forgive him... Keeta and Shep are just the perfect couple, in my opinion

Great work there PA

*PA blushes* DA, thank you so much for the compliments, its really nice to get feedback like that...

I so love writing the darker side of the characters/stuff that happens...

I also have a thing about Lorne and wanted him & Keeta to share 'moments' without it being of a sexual nature...I should let you in on a little secret, after ep6, I wrote a scene that wasn't going to be used between Keeta & Lorne (I'll post it in the adult section for you ok)...

I liked using Ford as well and having Shep as the bad guy & the reader not knowing if he was playing along with Ford, or actually 'bad' was fun for me to write...

As to the conclusion, there is always one so keep reading lol...


PA...

No need to thank, you know i like your stuff . AND they are a great balance to the unistuff I have to read, for they are so great... and not too long

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I started Episode 09 of Season 1 - Healing this afternoon! yay me *gg*:

just finished scene 11 (the rest has to wait till tomorrow):

Damn you should really put a warning at the beginning... something like make sure you have some Kleenex in reach!

I had to be very brave when I read scene 9... *sniff* poor Shep
And those messages he left... so cute.

Okay, warning, the last scene you will need kleenex...

And Scene 12, the next one, you see Lorne & Shep at each others throats , just coz I know you love Lorne...I like a bit of tension...

Then its all on to the fun for the last few scenes, minus the last paragraph which is tear jerking, ah the sunset...

Thanks for reading, hopefully you'll be inspiring others to read, with the nice feedback u r leaving for me...


PA...

finnished the last part of epi 9

Oh boy, scene 12 great one... the angry Lorne was great *gg*

The beach scenes were great too... I want a beach now *gg*
Oh and thanks for the kleenex-warning (^^)
Great the two sorted it out (^^)



I wonder what will happen next

Well that is the power of love, the ability to forgive and forget and move on...and just goes to show the kinda level she is on mentally now thanks to the gene things/knowledge...

What I like about that epi is that Jack was in it and from now on we see a lot more crossovers because of the Alliance and there is also a surprise appearance by an old favourite of mine...

The scene with Shep & Lorne I re-wrote as I initially had them ending up talking instead of leaving everything up in the air with them kinda hating each other...tension is always good...

I should re-read the 10 epis S2, coz I know S1 back to front lol, I lived and breathed it for so long when I was writing the 17 episodes (of S1), I re-read them when people are actively reading and going through them, so I remember what they are going on about in the feedback lol...


PA...

I totally forgot that to mention... Jack *yay*
I so love him, he's just great... and his remarks were so Jack (^^)

Lorne and Shep... they are not having a pillow fight, are they... wait that would be way to girly

Ep 10 & 11 are a two-parter and therefore shorter than a usual epi, you should get through them quicker, be prepared for Wraith action...


PA...

I just finished Epis 10 and 11 and am half way through Epi 12

I know I'm fantastic

Epis 10 and 11 are very good again, finally some Wratih action, though nobody got sucked
I was also quite excited when i read that Jonas was in *yay* Jonas is back!
Oh, and Sam and McKay... they are sooooo cute (^^).
Sam: "Just stay behind us McKay,[...] We'll protect you."
Poor Rodney.

Oh and epi 12 is a great one too... The ship... the council... everything... well i'm only half through but ... I want one of those "new" jumpers !

i've been reading them and i think they are really good (but you knew that already didnt you lol)

i just have to get reading the ones that have been up lately *grins* then i'll be able to post a bit more on them

yeah the Wraith Queen against a Furling... no match...the Furlings are cool imho, after all I created then as I imagined them to be...I liked Daniel's reaction to them and u will see a hell of a lot more of them in the next , well all of the epsiodes, they play a pivitol role...

Jonas had to appear at some stange just coz I wanted to write him in it...he doesn't have a 'big' part but he is in it, which is all that matters...

Sam & McKay, what can I say they, I love them together , the banter and there is more as the series progresses, banter, not shipping...

The council thing was interesting to write, but at the end of the day I didn't fully explore it in S2, maybe in S3, dunno...

Thanks for reading girls, it really means a lot to me that u read and enjoy becasue I get so much out of it writing them, I hope u do 2 reading them... Damn I getting sentimental, maybe its just coz I have lived and breathed the characters in my mind for so long in wiritng them, I get kinda excited when others read and enjoy the story, dunno, but its appreciated...



PA...

that Poem you made called Elisabeth was great PA

i know Sammy appreciate that

Oh my God Peggy that was soooo sweet you don't know how much that means to me. That explains everything i feel i can't stop crying....but don't worry it is a good kind of crying.
You don't know how much that means to me.

Thank you everyone who has been there for me!!! i really appriciate it!!!!

LOVE YOU ALL,
Sammy

just finally managed to read that S2 10th epi Liberty...

it was good epi...i really liked when Lorne told Capt. Peters that he let shep go and Peters totally was like wtf heh...and that Lorne kissed Peters

and that was cool when they tried (Furlings) to bring Keeta & Athan back
but ancients tried to stop them

O'Neill has funny lines there

and i really liked when shep & keeta meet at the beach at the end

Aww man looks like i'm the first to comment on the first part of season three.....

abso-f**king-lutly brilliant...... Whens the next part up?

Wow, you read it already?? I only just told you I'd posted it!

Thanks for reading and for loving it...


Next part could be up on Saturday...



PA...

I think i popped on about five seconds after you posted it all

I have to say i am really looking forward to finding out which direction you'll be taking this. Also i had completely forgotten about the new characters we all submitted.. It took me a moment to realise i was reading about my character when she appeared

The only thing i can say thats not complete praise is that i'm confuddled about what the new ship is like, From the PM's i thougth this was a -304+ Extra tech tacked on, but reading the chapter i got the impression it was more like the Aquilla

I guess I could describe the ship, I am so bad at that though, I kinda let people use their imaginations...what kinda ship do you think the Alliance would build??

The Epimetheus is not a city warship like the Aquila, more a Daedalus/Orion mix with Furling, Asgard, Ancient & Tau'ri tech...the only contribution the Nox made is their section in the infirmary...which I haven't gone into yet, probably won't unless something bad happens to one of the characters in the future...

I was gonna say, did you recognise Mjr. Suzi Frost lol...I thought she handled herself well...




PA...

I have to admit it wasn't till you stated talking about her past hat i realized it was my submission .... Long day